Remember when you are writing in the future that you are painting a picture with words in your readers mind. Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. XXX Before you try again I recommend that you take some creative writing courses. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. Remember when you are writing in the future that you are painting a picture with words in your readers mind. You obviously have a budding imagination but your writing skills leave much to be desired.
