At least try not to have the whole story a load of bs.anonymous readerReport 2010-12-19 16:08:33I can’t believe the previous comments that is was a good story. XNXX Sex C’ mon get real. Not only were there spelling mistakes and grammar errors, the story lacked substance. Also some lengthier and more detailed descriptions of the sexual activity would have improved the story and made it more erotic.«12» Not only were there spelling mistakes and grammar errors, the story lacked substance. At least try not to have the whole story a load of bs.anonymous readerReport 2010-12-19 16:08:33I can’t believe the previous comments that is was a good story. C’ mon get real. It was not a good story and the writer needs to do a lot more practicing before resubmitting if he ever wants to be a good writer.anonymous readerReport 2010-12-18 12:30:47good story made me rock hard the same thing sort of happend to meMuckerReport 2010-12-17 14:45:34Good story but it could benefit
