U missed the plot. Pornhat Cum on, the kid already brought lubrication? Thanks for enough imaginative input to get me hard though! :)Anonymous readerReport 2009-07-13 22:35:08you got a good base for a story, now u just need more detail and for it to be much longer! Cum on, the kid already brought lubrication? Actually have sex before you write a story!«12» 9 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places. :)Anonymous readerReport 2009-07-13 22:35:08you got a good base for a story, now u just need more detail and for it to be much longer! U missed the plot. also..whose kyle?Anonymous readerReport 2009-05-22 07:11:34Fake fake fake. Work on that and other technical details, and you’ll do well.
