If you don’t like it them move onanonymous readerReport 2013-02-28 22:16:38I gave you a negative for this one. XNXX A few area’s for improvement though. When did this become a lesson in writing and when did people that post on here have to be graded for their contributions? Also watch what types you put on top, you only had a gang rape of males/ female.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-28 00:38:25Break-up your paragraphs, watch your spelling and you capitalize CCUSA in one place and don’t in another (careful). A few area’s for improvement though. Instead of critisizing just read and move to the next story don’t bring a person down for having the guts to post here. 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-03-10 20:05:14Are you all kidding me? For something like this, a little back-story could be a great help.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-27 23:33:55Not bad but add some more detail«1» You need to work on your detail and the story length.
