it is ruining the story line… it is ruining the story line… XNXX Sex You need more segues between events.«1» But yeah, don’t switch so much between scenes. Make the switches new chapters or something.Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-05 03:09:55no no no no… no more incest… 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-14 20:58:48Nice twist with the sister being a he/she or he a guy raised as a girl. it is ruining the story line… Make the switches new chapters or something.Anonymous readerReport 2008-08-05 03:09:55no no no no… 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-14 20:58:48Nice twist with the sister being a he/she or he a guy raised as a girl. Just work on making the stories longer and making the transitions make more sense. this is just confusing.gayboyReport 2008-06-05 00:45:44its to confusing.i dont know who is whoREADERReport 2007-12-24 12:28:23I loved the first chapter. Just work on making the stories longer and making the transitions make more sense. it is ruining the story line…
