Does this amazing woman have a name? XNXX The constant use of ‘lol’ in his process of writing a story sounded awkwardly thrown in there, as though someone lacking any experience in writing had created this story. When speaking of oneself, I find it rather annoying when someone uses a lowercase ‘i’ rather than uppercase. Keep writing. I do hope you agree, as you seem at least slightly bothered by his unwillingness to proofread for the sake of a good read.Anonymous readerReport 2016-06-10 22:30:27sorry / crap.Anonymous readerReport 2015-09-25 17:20:55Your story needs to have more punctuation, better spelling, shorter sentences and more paragraphs. 5 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2016-10-24 00:10:25@Anonymous reader 2015-09-25 17:20:55 Earlier on he lists that her name is Lisa. Keep writing. But I strongly agree that he needs to work on his grammar more thoroughly. Does this amazing woman have a name? I feel he needs to work more on telling the story as a whole with issues such
