Because of that, I too didn’t get to the end of your story. XNXX Why don’t you ask someone to edit your story for you.. The screen can really bother your eyes. Because of that, I too didn’t get to the end of your story. You switch from third person “Kris was driving his car” to second person “after searching you(r) car you come back”, This makes it very confusing for the reader. First off-PARAGRAPHS! Finally SPELL CHECK. The lack of paragraphs, the switch from one tense to another,often withing two lines of text, all go to make it hard for the reader to appreciate the effort you have no doubt put in.
Actors:
Kenzie Reeves
