14 comments«123»READERReport 2008-02-14 23:00:29its an ok story you really need to work on how it was written. XXX work on sentence structure and grammar.READERReport 2007-10-05 12:15:19t was ok but you need to spell her right and also spell here right. work on sentence structure and grammar.READERReport 2007-10-05 12:15:19t was ok but you need to spell her right and also spell here right. 14 comments«123»READERReport 2008-02-14 23:00:29its an ok story you really need to work on how it was written. you got the two mixed up.READERReport 2007-08-17 17:09:27You left it open so you have a chance to improve, proofread, spellcheck, extend your plot, give it some more time and you should be fine. you got the two mixed up.READERReport 2007-08-17 17:09:27You left it open so you have a chance to improve, proofread, spellcheck, extend your plot, give it some more time and you should be fine.
