Plenty of details up to the bedroom, then it was slam, bang and asleep. XNXX The charcter descriptions were interlaced with great details and the author can have a great career if more time is spent with the other details. Still I gave it nine stars.READERReport 2004-07-05 22:23:57Great beginning and middle, but you stppoed too soon, dialogue and desciptions were great, but ended way, too soon.READERReport 2004-06-24 04:17:23nice pickup line haha
Great story!READERReport 2004-04-06 12:04:59gr8 story, gave it 7«1» The charcter descriptions were interlaced with great details and the author can have a great career if more time is spent with the other details. 4 comments«1»READERReport 2005-07-21 09:59:38This would could have been a ten star story if it was longer. 4 comments«1»READERReport 2005-07-21 09:59:38This would could have been a ten star story if it was longer.
