2 comments«1»READERReport 2007-11-18 18:28:28good job very originalREADERReport 2007-01-08 18:01:59Wow, what a great story. XNXX Sex The grammar is a little off, though its probably no worse than some people who have english as their first language. 2 comments«1»READERReport 2007-11-18 18:28:28good job very originalREADERReport 2007-01-08 18:01:59Wow, what a great story. In general, I thought the story was very good though, and a very interesting plot. Perhaps try and find someone to proof read for you, and also try and read more other stories (not necessarily sex stories) to get a better grasp of the sentence structures. Something different is nice.«1» Something different is nice.«1» 2 comments«1»READERReport 2007-11-18 18:28:28good job very originalREADERReport 2007-01-08 18:01:59Wow, what a great story. 2 comments«1»READERReport 2007-11-18 18:28:28good job very originalREADERReport 2007-01-08 18:01:59Wow, what a great story. Something different is nice.«1» 2 comments«1»READERReport 2007-11-18 18:28:28good job very originalREADERReport 2007-01-08 18:01:59Wow, what a great story. Something different is nice.«1» The grammar is a little off, though its probably no worse than some people who have english
