it was almost painful to read. Xxx video 7 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-12-19 22:50:00totally unrealistic its just to fake guess what im only 10 lolREADERReport 2006-03-28 18:38:28ok storyREADERReport 2006-03-28 18:37:08good story but needs more relistismREADERReport 2006-03-05 07:13:56This may be your first time writing a porn story, but it looks like it was your first time writing anything ever. Peace. You really need to write more about the characters, not just their clothes. it was almost painful to read. People don’t just go around fingering their friends; if they have a special relationship, we really need to know about it for this to make sense. Please learn how to use commas. Please learn how to use commas. Details are good, but they have to be the right details. This has promise, but your style needs a *lot* of work.
